Happy weekend, everyone! I’m switching gears this Sunday. This snippet is from my new WIP. The question I came up with this week is how do I best introduce a character when writing in first person POV? And, can I do that in 8-10 sentences?
Here’s the setup: When creatures like vampires, werewolves, or even innocent looking fairies go rogue and endanger human lives The Knight’s Watch Brigade shows up and stops them. This story features Samantha “Sam” Silverton and her trusty sidekick Max.
“Just my damn luck!” I peered into the blue-green waves of the Gulf of Mexico, and held on tight to the side of the lurching sixty-five foot charter boat, the Fish-&-Get-Em. “Watch out, Max, the mermaid’s got the anchor line, and she’s coming around for the kill!”
This was a different way to spend a day in Key West, but, hey, at least I wasn’t dodging the tourist crowds down on Duvall Street.
Hunting mermaids was not for the faint of heart. Rumor had it this particular muse from the deep had it in for the sailors of Key West, but no one knew why, so I’d volunteered for the assignment when The Knight’s Watch Brigade offered it. My official badge reads Samantha Silverton – Water Elements Specialist. Okay, so I’m a monster hunter.
I turned and yelled at my trusty side-kick Max, “Cut her loose before she sinks the damn boat!”
Max, my thirty-five pound Maine Coon Cat bounded up to the back of the center mounted fighting chair, and yelled, “Cut that anchor, Captain Tom, or else we’re all going down!”
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Did not suspect a cat. Great snippet. Can’t wait for more
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A cat as a side kick, that sounds interesting. This mermaid seems very wild indeed.
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Love the name of the ship! And I love her casual thought of “okay, so I’m a monster hunter”, that is just perfect. I’m already intrigued by this and want to know why the mermaid has it out for the sailors of Key West now as well. I love how the sidekick is a Coon cat, this shall prove a very interesting tale. Nice setup.
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Fun snippet. I love the talking cat — and mermaid hunting is definitely something different.
(Proofreading note: “faint” of heart, not “feint”…)
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Nice catch, PT. Yeah – who fishes for mermaids, right?
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I think your first person POV is wonderful!! It grabbed my attention and pulled me in.
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It just feels right for this story. I appreciate your comment, Zaneymom.
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Sounds to me like you did a pretty good job of introducing you characters and the world they live. I can’t wait to read more. 🙂
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I’m glad Sam and Max came across on the page, Jennifer. Thanks for stopping by.
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Love it! Unique characters! Great world-building.
I just finished Three Wishes… will be leaving a review as soon as I can make the time. Wonderful story!
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I’m so glad to know you enjoyed Three Wishes, Teresa. That was fun to write!
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This is great! Different, entertaining, and any story with a talking maine coon cat as a character gets my vote! You introduce Max very well indeed – this works well as first person.
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Thank you, Peter. I’m so glad you stopped by – thrilled you liked Max.
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Love the descriptiveness, and what’s not to love about a talking cat?
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Wow, Aston. Thanks. I think Max is a hit today. 🙂
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First person works great here, and I love all the imaginative elements to this story. Talking cat sidekick? Awesome!
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Awesome, Joyce. I appreciate your input. Max has some interesting things to say throughout the story.
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I liked how you didn’t let on until the very last line that the sidekick was a talking cat. I love it. Effing will love it, too!
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Do tell Effing Max has plenty of catnip to share, Ed. Thanks – I’m tickled you liked the snippet.
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I love it, VERY different! Excellent excerpt…
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Thanks, Veronica.
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Paula,
You did a wonderful job with first person. Loved the snippet!
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Oh, thanks so much, Bonnie. I think paranormal romance is a great place for first person. Somehow it just feels right for Sam to tell her story.
Great to see you here!
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Flow is a the word for this snippet. Add wonderful and we’ve got it!
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Thanks so much for stopping by, Charmaine. Great to know the story’s flowing.
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Monster hunter and a talking cat? That’s bound to be an interesting tale. Great snippet, Paula. 🙂
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Anything’s possible when you have fantasy and magic on your side. It’s coming along, Siobhan. Thanks for checking in.
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Thanks for the positive reinforcement, Kim. Glad to know this one goes down easy. I’m liking the First Person POV for this tale.
Thanks for visiting today!
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What a brilliant story, Paula. I loved it! I felt it flowed just right, it read smooth and easy (just like a good drink. ;-)).
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